Friday, October 16, 2015

My Scene Description!

              !!WELCOME BACK TO TERM 4!!

This week for literacy I picked scene description. You had to describe the scene that you had picked from google images.This is my success criteria and my goal is the last sentence which is number 7. I was proud of my word choices. Here is my scene description.



Success Criteria


  • Has strong adjectives
  • Different sentence beginnings
  • Different sentence lengths
  • A simile and/or alliteration
  • Has an introduction, body and conclusion
  • Thoughtful word choices
  • Show examples of single, compound and complex sentences.
I hear noises! Suddenly, In the distance I see the most beautiful thing ever. Four magical deer's are wandering around  and playing. The big deer looks around. He snorts like a pig. He looks like he is about to charge,  like a bull. They are so beautiful. You wouldn't want to leave this beautiful place.   They look like creatures from a magical dream. Crispy trees are as orange as marigolds. Autumn is so beautiful.  It's a place like home! The deer's look so powerful and grand. The trees look so mysterious. The most beautiful,  peaceful, relaxing, sight ever.