I have been working with Mr M. Our writing was about retell. We had to pick a story we would like to retell, And I picked Hansel and Gretel. But I did the other way around. Now its called Gretel and Hansel. I hope you enjoy my story.
GRETEL AND HANSEL!
GRETEL AND HANSEL!
There once lived a poor woodcutter in the middle of the woods, with his mean step wife and his children. Although he did know that his step wife is witch.
She had killed his first wife, who was beautiful, kind, and she always tries to feed her husband and her children. But that ugly witch killed her, because she was jealous of her beauty.
The witch always says to herself “Oh why did I marry a stupid, old and poor woodcutter. They always run out of food. One night gretel heard her parents fighting. She puts her ear to the hole in the wall where she can hear and see, everything that is going on in her parents room.
I hear mum and dad fighting in their room. “Mother wants to leave us in the woods, and that’s alone”!!!! I tell my lazy brother, hansel. He is always sleeping. He doesn’t care about anything. A fly was fluttering over his mouth. I get my slingshot, and hit the fly with my rock. It falls into his mouth. “GULP”! He swallows it. “Uh uh uh”! What!? I tell him what Mother is going to do to us.
I was shocked when I heard what she said. I said. ”But I don’t care because I WANT to be in the woods exploring the nature”. “oh”! said Gretel. “SO DO YOU WANT STARVE IN THE WOODS, EAT SLUGS AND SNAILS, MAKE WEAPONS TO HUNT RABBITS AND DEERS, AND LIVE THERE UNTIL WE TURN 991 AND DIE”!!!!! She shouts at me like she is my own mother. But I do not care a single bit. Not even a piece of crumb.
What kind of brother is he. A PIG? “BANG BANG’!!!! someone knocks on our bedroom door. (Really hard if i say so myself)!
“HURRY UP YOU STUPID CHILDREN”!!! yelled mother. (MEAN UGLY STUPID STEP MOTHER I SHOULD SAY)! “HURRY UP AND GET READY”! WE NEED TO GO AND HAVE A PICNIC IN THE WOODS”! “Right now’?! I ask. “At 9pm”?!?!?! “OH JUST HURRY UP”! Says mother. She leaves the room by banging the door really REALLY HARD! “BANG”!!! So me and hansel get ready. NOT! We were already dressed and we looked perfect!
We walk out our bedroom door, and have a race up to the front door of our little cottage. Mother and father were waiting for us. For some reason father looked really sad. And do I care? NO! “Let’s go”! I shout. We slowly walked through the darkness. We were even further in the woods then usual. Now I’m even more excited.
Now i’m very nervous. “STAY HERE WHILE WE GO PICK SOME APPLES’! says mother. “STAY HERE OR YOU WILL GET LOST”!
But suddenly a wolf comes out of nowhere. But for some reason he started ATTACKING OUR STEP MOThER! “AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH”!!!!!!! Screams mother, and when I say scream I mean SCRRRRRREEEEEEAAAAMMMMMM! Me and hansel hug our father. Until…………. MOTHER DIES!!!! Wait why should I say mother? I mean witch! HA HA HA HA HA HA!!!! And it doesn’t mean if I laugh I’m a witch too! The wolf looks at us. NOW I AM TERRIFIED! But the wolf didn’t attack us, instead he started to TALK!!???? “NOW U WILL NOT NEED TO SUFFER BEING TORTURED BY THAT WITCH”! I HAVE BEEN SENT FROM HEAVEN”! YOUR MOTHER SENT ME TO SAVE YOU”! NOW I SHALL LEAVE”! NO NEED TO THANK ME”! LIVE YOUR LIFE AND BE A NORMAL PERSON”! AND HERE IS SOME MONEY SO YOU CAN BUY FOOD”!
I WAS SHOCKED! I almost started to cry. WE WERE SO HAPPY NOW WE CAN LIVE HAPPILY! THANK YOU MUMMY! DADDY STARTED TO CRY!
I was so happy now we will be happy forever!